The roller coaster known as "The Hulk" rose high up into the air with arches and turns not for the faint of heart. From the entrance of the ride I heard the screams of delighted passengers as they flew threw the sky on that green metal chariot and in that moment I knew this would be my first roller coaster. Amazed by the sights and sounds I took in I urged my family to come with me onto the metal contraption. Unfortunately my family did not share my enthusiasm, my mother and father were apparently prone to motion sickness, and my brother, afraid of heights. It would appear I would brave the unknown alone, without anyone to guide me I would plunge into the deep end alone.
Reluctantly, I made my way through the line, not sure if I should continue alone, yet drawn forward by the screams of joy and the thunder of machinery. At last the moment had come. I strapped myself into my chair and awaited whatever might have come next. The centipede of metal chairs slowly began to move toward it's track which to my excitement was up a steep ramp. As my metal chariot rose ever higher into the sky my enthusiasm rose as well. Then, almost instantly, the ride shot forward into the open sky, like an eagle flying above the ground. As I flew through the air an undeniable laughter overtook me as I felt a new type of joy I had to experience, freedom. Never before had I gone on my own and faced the unknown like I did. In that moment it was like a baby eagle jumping out of his nest and discovering that he could soar over those who didn't take the same chance as he. Maybe it was just the adrenaline I was feeling at the time but to me, had I stayed with my family and not taken a chance on my own I would have never experienced that joy.
Very interesting story! I enjoyed it mostly because of a similar experience I had (except I was 14). Nice use of sensory detail, I could easily imagine the setting you describe. This being said, it would have been more captivating if you had used smell or touch in your story to further put me in your shoes. I also was amused by the metaphor of the baby eagle leaving his nest. I think you could have elaborated more on how this event gave you a sense of freedom and also how this changed your life later on. Your conclusion also seemed a bit rushed but overall, funny, interesting story with plenty of sensory details.
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